Consider these two scenarios.
1) Adam and Eve are exchanging the most mindblowing of kisses, when Lucifer walks into the room. Frustrated at the interruption, Adam pulls away. After a heated argument with Lucifer, Eve storms off.If only her ex would get the message and leave her alone. Adam runs after her, and just as he’s about to catch up, he gets run over by a man on a bike. He is taken to hospital. Eve, worried sick and feeling guilty, rushes to his side. Seeing this strong man so pale and weak almost breaks her heart, but it makes her more determined than ever to salvage their relationship. She leans over him and gives him a heart-stopping smile. “I love you,” she whispers. Adam takes a long breath. “I love—“BEEEEEEEEEP.” He crashes, and nurses and doctors swarm into the room. Wide-eyed, Eve is bustled into the visitor area, where she waits anxiously for news.
2) Gary Oswald Darwin, the boss of Paradise Inc., takes Adam, a young upstarter in the legal department, under his wing. Gary also encourages his daughter Eve to spend time with the young man. Adam enjoys her company, at least until Lucifer, Gary’s former business partner, returns from an extended business trip. Adam is charged with untangling complicated contractual details and visits Lucifer to discuss the situation. The two hit it off. When Lucifer kisses Adam, both feel the tingle.The surge of emotions that sweeps over Adam is unfamiliar territory, and he melts into Lucifer’s arms. They move toward the bedroom, where Adam shoves Lucifer away. Wide-eyed, Adam runs off. Walking the streets, he berates himself. His career is just taking off, his boss is nuts about him, and he has a nice, beautiful woman hanging on his every word. Why is he letting some man derail his life?What the hell is wrong with him?
Scenario one is a series of coincidences. Scenario two is some serious conflict. Even though both stories are told, not shown, you feel yourself drawn into the second more than the first. Agents and editors are looking for conflict, so make sure you get it right.
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